Skin is riven, ripped to ribbons. Mercy fled, would not be given.
Strict conviction spangled visage, mangled image. Spite was driven.
Looks are kin with torn-up fish's viscid innards, leaking freely.
Rigid fist insisted on eclipsing any hindrance, really.
Cyclops spawned iconic bygones till we wished his haunting eye gone.
Photons got re-honored, could not pass through fallen optic pylon.
Crunching orb beneath a tread embedded pleasure in our senses.
Downward pounding had amount proportioned by perceived offenses.
Tight restriction acted like resistance training, raised potential
Way beyond a level any sane review could deem prudential.
Fury seemed essential when against a manner so oppressive,
Plus, when fury pitched a case for helping, perks were quite impressive.
Stomping brought conclusion, crushed the villain's vile, vast dominion.
Bloody show subdued the hue of rue, the blush from loss to minion.
Bloody show subdued the hue of rue, the blush from loss to minion.
One of your finest sonic explosions here, Jack, a luscious crunch of syllables and andante dance of vowels. And I like the modern apocalyptic message: clearly you are paying attention to changes happening below the level of the ears and eyes.
ReplyDeleteThis is good. Awesome penning.
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem. Very evocative. More than a little bloody! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteWow! A powerful piece, which has all the elements that a literary poetry should have...You got a new follower today!! Loved your wordplay...amazing!!
ReplyDeletePhew.... that was some death scene. Glad the monster was defeated, especially if it was evil. Very vivid imagery in this. I could almost hear and feel the blows and the last few stomps... yikes!
ReplyDeleteGreat word use! Your poem has really nice consonance.
ReplyDeleteGood one Jack very powerful piece,
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Very intense. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI found myself holding my breath and reading ever faster thanks to the well-planned pace and rhythm of this piece. Vivid and aggressive, the poem took me inside the mind of the aggressor, illuminating sensations and impressions I would never otherwise experience.
ReplyDeleteLoved it! You must have kicked ass at reading comprehension in school.
ReplyDeleteRawr. This felt very Game of Thrones...(in a good way)!
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