He will triple the stress like a rabid Molossus
By thrashing your balance. Depression colossus
Can chomp on carotid of calm till necrotic
Remains turn to rotting--he'll leave you neurotic.
You're an idiot waiting for masterful drainer
To empty your spirit then taint the container.
The robber is scheming deletion of honor.
Esteem as a positive thing is a goner.
You'll despise your own being for being enveloped
By story of "physics uniquely developed
To doggedly bother till man has to settle."
A guy has combined you with indolent fettle.
You are faint consolation, the state of surrender--
Companion is dreading what effort will render.
Inertia permitted his body to find you.
It's stupid to let his passivity bind you.
No one rhymes like you, Jack :-)
ReplyDeleteThe tone is strangely friendly....I heard this as advice from one friend to another about a bad dude (a "balance thrasher," if you will).
ReplyDeleteThis work has a really sense of an unstoppable juggernaut - a relentless progression.
ReplyDeleteGreat flow and rhyming Jack plus some really cool phrases.
ReplyDeletedang, nice intensity sir...i kinda got that juggernaut feel as well...the inertia of the inevitable...really like this line too...Esteem as a positive thing is a goner.
ReplyDeleteonly a true master of prosody could write that first line.your poems should become part of prosodic textbooks.brilliant as ever.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful.. great rhyme ..
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed reading this. The rhyme is wonderful as backdrop for such wise advice. Love your style.
ReplyDeleteYou are a master of this form, your rhythm and meter and rhyming are impeccable - that is no small skill. I enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteOnce again a word from a master of poetic flow, enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteI like your obvious enjoyment of words.
ReplyDeleteYou compliment me on my rhymes then I come over here to see: Molossus/ colossus, necrotic/neurotic... Creeping away, back to my simple drawing board.
ReplyDeleteAh, I agree one should not let someone else's passivity bind one. Another effective write, Jack! Always great to see you in Poetry Jam.
ReplyDeleteWow. I have been there (and am not too excited to admit that) but could never have described it so intricately yet succinctly. Great poem! :)
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