It's unlikely that Tyche will like me. Thus far
She incited her pikeman to pike me. No scar
Can solidify rightly when wounding is set
To forever. I have no endeavor.
When reality stabs, I prefer to divert
My awareness away from the sedulous hurt.
I'm incredulous, doubting my tremulous bone.
No reposure is winning composure.
I am sessile, no longer a vessel of go,
And have nestled to wrestle with worry. I trow
That my happenstance, routed by deity's laugh,
Has been sacking my zeal, so I'm lacking.
Your poetry isn't lacking though.
ReplyDeleteI really like the first stanza. Nicely written
ReplyDeleteinternal and external rhymes working wonderfully well... enjoying the enjambment also. A great flow and feel.
ReplyDeleteHa, sad about after all that endeavor, there is no forever!! Happy Sunday, Jack. Another gem.
ReplyDeleteWhen the deity laughs, Jack, it is no small thing, especially when one has been stabbed by Reality
ReplyDeleteWonderfully played with word
ReplyDeleteand here I scurry to the dictionary again...and its really rarely that i get caught in my heels by someone's vocabulary.but you my friend are a regular Joe Thesaurus.well done and keep going.
ReplyDeleteWonderful internal rhymes. I also enjoyed the last two lines and the image of the deity laughing! Well done.
ReplyDeleteI am contemplating your comfort in this. Maybe you have just learned your place in Tyche's scheme of things?
ReplyDeleteIn Tyche's scheme of things, the earth couldn't possibly be moving at thousands of miles an hour through space, it was too cumbersome. Somehow, I think that allows a logical escape.
ReplyDeleteMy zeal has been sacked so bad it was a safety, I know, terrible football joke for a Sunday but your ingenious rhyming makes up for it 8^D
ReplyDeleteWow, the wordplay here is fantastic! Love the deity's laugh! I am POSITIVE the deity has a GREAT sense of humor! Because he gave it to all of us!
ReplyDeleteLove those internal rhymes!! Especially "sessile, no longer a vessel..." very clever :-)
ReplyDeletestabbed by reality...ouch!! good one Jack
ReplyDeleteI hope your zeal is not truly sacked.
ReplyDeleteAmazing wordplay, Jack. Every time I come here, I learn a new word! Kudos friend!
ReplyDeleteGreat job..
Very clever wordplay - well done.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Your internal rhymes are fabulous, effective, combining with a cadence and flow that is at once comfortable and dissonant. Knowing I will learn from you, I always look forward to your diction. You never disappoint. Skilled, this.
ReplyDeleteI am quite surprised at how much I like your rhyme here. Carefully put and well done.
ReplyDeleteWow! That's a veritable cascade of rhyming!
ReplyDeleteLiking the rhyme! Often I might find the density of it overrhymed but you manage it with a sure hand and it keeps the narrative on a great flow
ReplyDeleteYou are definitely not lacking in poetic talent! Great poem.
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